The Saddest Thing

i am a open door
that never let anyone through
not even the moon

a sadness within
my eye’s, so disappointed
with this life
in love with those
i only dream of
lost in world’s which
do not exist

keeping my heart
too far away to touch
a ghost in love
is the saddest thing
the kind of lonely
that cannot be fixed

i pour myself
into all of the spaces
i never knew i could fit
to find the parts of me
i left hidden
between pages of a poem
i never wanted to forget

i want to be saved
but i don’t want
to save myself
someday the light
will find a way
through the cracks

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Not much to tell, antisocial, bipolar, loner, poet. That's me in 4 word's.

9 thoughts on “The Saddest Thing

    1. Do you think I should have stopped at through the cracks? Not every poem needs imagery right? I mean this is all about feelings, truth,pain. I didn’t think I needed to dress it up and make it pretty?

      1. Oh, I never give suggestions on how something should be written, but since you asked. I love powerful endings that tend to inspire readers,. Ending this with the line “through the cracks” may have been more emotional. drawing a stronger reaction. I loved it as is, but the other way may have been stronger. Sorry, for the honesty

      2. Don’t be sorry, I’m the one asking you for your opinion. I don’t get upset if I’m asking. I know I should be more open to suggestions, but when they come from someone I don’t know, don’t want to know, would not comment on their writing because I don’t like it. I’m not good at that, I don’t think I ever will be. I didn’t use a lot of imagery because I didn’t want to, it is not that kind of poem, and well damn, it is my poem!

      3. You are right, it is better without the last line, so I changed it. Thank you for being honest with me, you probably thought I was going to get all syco on you! I promise I would not do that, I trust your opinion. Thank you for being my friend!

      4. No, I didn’t think that at all.
        I haven’t been following you for very long, but what I’ave read has been beautiful, sometimes a little painful, and inspiring as well. Some people string words together and think that is poetry, you write from the soul. I admire your work.
        And it is always a pleasure discussing poetry with you.

      5. Thank you so much! I like talking about poetry with you too, you are a amazing writer and I value your opinion. I don’t want to be a pest, so you let me know if I bother you to much.

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